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21st Feb 2013, 11:50 AM Episode #6 script

II think I had more problems with this stupid episode than I've ever had with anything I've ever made before (maybe I'm exaggerating, but that's how it felt). It felt like it was never going to end. It was like writing a term paper. Don't get me wrong, I loved writing the script. But I had so many problems translating it to the final product it came out feeling very uninspired. Plus I kept having problems with the plausibilty of it. Part of that I'm sure was due to the fact that it took so long. If I could have gotten it done quicker, I might have questioned it less and not have felt the need to change it.

But alas, it's over and done with now and nobody is happier than me for that. So here are the drafts I wrote. I realize that even the second is very different from the final story. In a way I think the final story is kind of like the last polishing of the script. Which would be great if it came out better than the first ones, which it didn't.

Draft One

Episode #6 – I want to break free PART II

1              Narration – With Stardust still trapped in the little girl’s house, Freddie tries desperately to free him.

Ext. Road – Day. - Freddie is talking to the squirrel by the tree.

Squirrel – Listen I’d love to help but I have problems of my own to deal with.

2              Squirrel - Unless you have something to make it worth my while…

                Freddie – I think I could get you some cheese curls.

Squirrel – A-a-a-a-nd?

Freddie – Uh ok… how about a Pepsi?

Squirrel – How big?

Freddie – 20 oz?

Squirrel – Make it a 2 liter and you got yourself a deal.

Freddie – Alright. So what do we do?

                Squirrel – Whoa there little guy. I require satisfactory compensation BEFORE any services are rendered.

3              Freddie – Look, my friend could be dying in there! Can’t you make an exception just this once?

Squirrel – I’m sorry Dave I just can’t do that.

Freddie – What? Why are you calling me Dave?

Squirrel – Don’t do this Dave.

Freddie – Do what?

                Squirrel – You’re endangering the mission Dave.

                Freddie – Ok that’s it I don’t have time for this.

                                He storms off.

                Squirrel – Would you like to hear me sing a song Dave?

4                              Int. - Girl’s bedroom. The girl slips a sweatshirt on.

                Girl – Did you sleep good sweetie?

                                Stardust is lying on her pillow.

Stardust – Hmm, yes actually it was quite cozy but I still would have preferred if it were consensual.

Girl – Now you’ll have to stay here while I’m at school. But I’ll be back later to play some more!

                She picks up her backpack and leaves.

Stardust – Oh goody.

5              Stardust – I feel as if I shall never escape this place.

Parakeet – Is it really all that bad?

Stardust – Back home I had everything I have here except one crucial difference: My owner leaves me alone!  

Parakeet – I guess you never know what you got till it’s gone…

Stardust – Correction my friend, I knew exactly what I had. This is why I must get back!

Parakeet – So what do you intend to do?

Stardust - …I’m still working on that.

                Pause

                He smiles wide (a la “the Grinch”).

Stardust – I know just what to do.

6              Narration – Later that day…

Int. girl’s house – He sits at the table in the dress as he was before, but now with the evil grin on his face.

                Stardust – 3, 2, 1…

                                They hear barking in the next room.

                Girl – Lucky? What is it boy?

She gets up to see what the matter is.

7              He throws off the dress and runs away.

The girl comes back.

                Girl – Don’t know what got into… him.

                                She sees that he is gone.

Girl - …kitty?

8                              Cut to – Stardust running.

                Stardust – I’m free! I’m free!

                                He stops for a moment.

                Stardust – Now the question is—

                                The shot widens to reveal he is completely surrounded by trees.

                Stardust – Where the hell am I?

9                              He hears a voice offscreen.

                Voice – Where’s the money Lebowski?!

He looks around and sees the squirrel (who henceforth will be referred to as “Leader” for the sake of distinction) with two henchmen. They are roughing up a chipmunk.

                Leader – You’ve had two weeks Lebowski.

                                He punches the chipmunk in the stomach.

Leader - This isn’t good business Lebowski.

                Stardust – What are you doing?

10                           Leader turns around.

                Leader – You? What are you doing here?

                Stardust – I’ve just escaped from a rather unpleasant entrapment.

                Leader – Well we’re kind of busy here so could you please go home.

                Stardust – I would love to but unfortunately I have no idea where I am or how to get there.

                Leader – Could you hang on just one second?

                                He slaps the chipmunk across the face.

                Leader – If I don’t get my money in 24 hours you’ll wish you were never born Lebowski.

                                They let him go.

11           Leader – I’m sorry you had to see that.

                Stardust – Yeah whatever. Now could you tell me how to get home?

                Leader – Oh you’re a lo-o-o-o-ng way from there my friend. I could arrange for transportation…

                Stardust – I don’t have anything to give you.

                Leader – Oh really? What’s thing around your neck then?

                Stardust – Hey I know what you’re thinking and you can forget it!

12           Leader – Fine then. It’s about four hours to your house by foot. If you start walking I’m sure you can make it before midnight. 

                Stardust – But…it’s…Canadian.

Leader – Yeah, so is Mike Meyers. Ciao!

                He and his henchmen start to walk away.

Stardust – Wait.

                Leader turns around.

13           Leader – I’m listening…

                                Stardust unties the bag from around his neck and holds it up.

Stardust – Now get me the hell outta here!

                                Leader snatches the bag from him.

Leader – Wait here.

                They leave. Stardust sits down. A few minutes go by.

14           Stardust – Ok… Just…waiting here.

                Pause

                Stardust - He’s not coming back is he?

                Pause

Stardust - Bastard.

15                           He gets up and begins to walk away. Suddenly a hawk swoops down and lands in front of him.

Hawk – I have been instructed to take you to your house.

Stardust – Well it’s about bloody ti--

                The hawk picks him up by his arms and flies him high into the sky.

16+17    Stardust – Man I can see everyone from here. This must be what it feels like to work for Google.

                Hawk– Do you see your house yet?

Stardust – Ummm….There it is! Hey I didn’t know we had a chimney.

Hawk – Down the chimney eh? Whatever you say!

Stardust – No I didn’t say down the chimney you—

18                           He drops him down the chimney. He rolls out into the living room kicking up soot everywhere.

                Stardust - *Cough Cough*.

                                Freddie runs down the stairs.

                Freddie – My good friend you are alive! I was so very, very worried.

                                He looks around.

                Freddie – Wow, what a mess.

19           Stardust – Eh it’ll be fine. Where is she off to?

                Freddie – Looking for you I think. Where have you been anyway?

Stardust – Oh where haven’t I been? I’ve seen parts of the commonwealth I never even knew existed! And where were you?

Freddie – Well I tried to rescue you but…I had no idea you had so few friends.

                                The front door begins to open.

                Stardust – Here she is, am-scray!

20 + 21  Owner - *Gasp* There you are!

                                She runs and picks him up.

Owner – Oh you’ve been playing in the fireplace! I should be angry at you but I’m just happy you’re safe!

                                She hugs him.

                Stardust – You know I don’t think I’ve been happier to see your butch dyke haircut either.

22                           Int. – Attic - They sit in front of the TV.

                Narration – Later that day…

                Stardust - …and that’s how it all happened.

                Freddie – A tortured artist hamster. Now there’s something you don’t see every day.

                Stardust – Yeah. It was both entertaining and tragic at the same time.

                Freddie – One thing I don’t get is: how did you get that dog to bark just when you needed him to?

23                           Cut to – Lucky sitting on an enormous pile of cookies.

24           Stardust – I’ll never tell.

                Narration – Fin.

Episode #6 – I want to break free PART II

1              Narration – With Stardust still trapped in the little girl’s house, Freddie tries desperately to free him.

Ext. Road – Day. - Freddie is talking to the squirrel by the tree.

Squirrel – Listen I’d love to help but I have problems of my own to deal with.

2              Squirrel - Unless you have something to make it worth my while…

                Freddie – I think I could get you some cheese curls.

Squirrel – A-a-a-a-nd?

Freddie – Uh ok… how about a Pepsi?

Squirrel – How big?

Freddie – 20 oz?

Squirrel – Make it a 2 liter and you got yourself a deal.

Freddie – Alright. So what do we do?

                Squirrel – Whoa there little guy. I require satisfactory compensation BEFORE any services are rendered.

3              Freddie – Look, my friend could be dying in there! Can’t you make an exception just this once?

Squirrel – I’m sorry Dave I just can’t do that.

Freddie – What? Why are you calling me Dave?

Squirrel – Don’t do this Dave.

Freddie – Do what?

                Squirrel – You’re endangering the mission Dave.

                Freddie – Ok that’s it I don’t have time for this.

                                He storms off.

                Squirrel – Would you like to hear me sing a song Dave?

4                              Int. - Girl’s bedroom. The girl slips a sweatshirt on.

                Girl – Did you sleep good sweetie?

                                Stardust is lying on her pillow.

Stardust – Hmm, yes actually it was quite cozy but I still would have preferred if it were consensual.

Girl – Now you’ll have to stay here while I’m at school. But I’ll be back later to play some more!

                She picks up her backpack and leaves.

Stardust – Oh goody.

5              Stardust – I feel as if I shall never escape this place.

Parakeet – Is it really all that bad?

Stardust – Back home I had everything I have here except one crucial difference: My owner leaves me alone!  

Parakeet – I guess you never know what you got till it’s gone…

Stardust – Correction my friend, I knew exactly what I had. This is why I must get back!

Parakeet – So what do you intend to do?

Stardust - …I’m still working on that.

                Pause

                He smiles wide (a la “the Grinch”).

Stardust – I know just what to do.

6              Narration – Later that day…

Int. girl’s house – He sits at the table in the dress as he was before, but now with the evil grin on his face.

                Stardust – 3, 2, 1…

                                They hear barking in the next room.

                Girl – Lucky? What is it boy?

She gets up to see what the matter is.

7              He throws off the dress and runs away.

The girl comes back.

                Girl – Don’t know what got into… him.

                                She sees that he is gone.

Girl - …kitty?

8                              Cut to – Stardust running.

                Stardust – I’m free! I’m free!

                                He stops for a moment.

                Stardust – Now the question is—

                                The shot widens to reveal he is completely surrounded by trees.

                Stardust – Where the hell am I?

9                              He hears a voice offscreen.

                Voice – Where’s the money Lebowski?!

He looks around and sees the squirrel (who henceforth will be referred to as “Leader” for the sake of distinction) with two henchmen. They are roughing up a chipmunk.

                Leader – You’ve had two weeks Lebowski.

                                He punches the chipmunk in the stomach.

Leader - This isn’t good business Lebowski.

                Stardust – What are you doing?

10                           Leader turns around.

                Leader – You? What are you doing here?

                Stardust – I’ve just escaped from a rather unpleasant entrapment.

                Leader – Well we’re kind of busy here so could you please go home.

                Stardust – I would love to but unfortunately I have no idea where I am or how to get there.

                Leader – Could you hang on just one second?

                                He slaps the chipmunk across the face.

                Leader – If I don’t get my money in 24 hours you’ll wish you were never born Lebowski.

                                They let him go.

11           Leader – I’m sorry you had to see that.

                Stardust – Yeah whatever. Now could you tell me how to get home?

                Leader – Oh you’re a lo-o-o-o-ng way from there my friend. I could arrange for transportation…

                Stardust – I don’t have anything to give you.

                Leader – Oh really? What’s thing around your neck then?

                Stardust – Hey I know what you’re thinking and you can forget it!

12           Leader – Fine then. It’s about four hours to your house by foot. If you start walking I’m sure you can make it before midnight. 

                Stardust – But…it’s…Canadian.

Leader – Yeah, so is Mike Meyers. Ciao!

                He and his henchmen start to walk away.

Stardust – Wait.

                Leader turns around.

13           Leader – I’m listening…

                                Stardust unties the bag from around his neck and holds it up.

Stardust – Now get me the hell outta here!

                                Leader snatches the bag from him.

Leader – Wait here.

                They leave. Stardust sits down. A few minutes go by.

14           Stardust – Ok… Just…waiting here.

                Pause

                Stardust - He’s not coming back is he?

                Pause

Stardust - Bastard.

15                           He gets up and begins to walk away. Suddenly a hawk swoops down and lands in front of him.

Hawk – I have been instructed to take you to your house.

Stardust – Well it’s about bloody ti--

                The hawk picks him up by his arms and flies him high into the sky.

16+17    Stardust – Man I can see everyone from here. This must be what it feels like to work for Google.

                Hawk– Do you see your house yet?

Stardust – Ummm….There it is! Hey I didn’t know we had a chimney.

Hawk – Down the chimney eh? Whatever you say!

Stardust – No I didn’t say down the chimney you—

18                           He drops him down the chimney. He rolls out into the living room kicking up soot everywhere.

                Stardust - *Cough Cough*.

                                Freddie runs down the stairs.

                Freddie – My good friend you are alive! I was so very, very worried.

                                He looks around.

                Freddie – Wow, what a mess.

19           Stardust – Eh it’ll be fine. Where is she off to?

                Freddie – Looking for you I think. Where have you been anyway?

Stardust – Oh where haven’t I been? I’ve seen parts of the commonwealth I never even knew existed! And where were you?

Freddie – Well I tried to rescue you but…I had no idea you had so few friends.

                                The front door begins to open.

                Stardust – Here she is, am-scray!

20 + 21  Owner - *Gasp* There you are!

                                She runs and picks him up.

Owner – Oh you’ve been playing in the fireplace! I should be angry at you but I’m just happy you’re safe!

                                She hugs him.

                Stardust – You know I don’t think I’ve been happier to see your butch dyke haircut either.

22                           Int. – Attic - They sit in front of the TV.

                Narration – Later that day…

                Stardust - …and that’s how it all happened.

                Freddie – A tortured artist hamster. Now there’s something you don’t see every day.

                Stardust – Yeah. It was both entertaining and tragic at the same time.

                Freddie – One thing I don’t get is: how did you get that dog to bark just when you needed him to?

23                           Cut to – Lucky sitting on an enormous pile of cookies.

24           Stardust – I’ll never tell.

                Narration – Fin.

Draft Two

                               

Episode #6 – I want to break free PART II

Act I

1a                           Int. - Girl’s bedroom. The girl slips a sweatshirt on.

                Girl – Did you sleep good sweetie?

2a                           Stardust is lying on her pillow.

Stardust – Hmm, yes actually it was quite cozy but I still would have preferred if it were consensual.

Girl – Now you’ll have to stay here while I’m at school. But I’ll be back later!

                She picks up her backpack and leaves.

Stardust –Oh goody.  I feel as if I shall never escape this place.

3a           Parakeet – Is it really all that bad?

Stardust – Back home I had everything I have here except one crucial difference: My owner leaves me alone! 

Parakeet – I guess you never know what you got till it’s gone…

Stardust – Correction my friend, I knew exactly what I had. This is why I must get back!

                                He hears a voice offscreen.

                Voice – You’ll never get out you know…

4a                           Stardust turns and sees a fish in a bowl.

                Fish – I tried for three years. I still remember that day…when they took me…

Int. Lake – The fish swims along with a smile on his face. A shadow slowly casts over him. He glances up and a look of terror spreads across his face.

Cut back to Girls room.

                Fish – That was the last time I saw my family…

                                Stardust sits there with a quizzical expression on his face.

                Stardust – So yeah anyway, back to my problem. Now there’s got to be some way…

5a           Fish – There is. All drains lead to the sea.

                Stardust – Yeah that’s great for you! What am I supposed to do?

                Fish – There’s also the back door which is usually open.

                Stardust – why didn’t you say that like I don’t know…twelve hours ago?!

                Sprinkles – You didn’t ask me.

                Pause

Narration – Then he got an idea. An awful idea. A wonderful, awful idea.

                He smiles wide (a la “the Grinch”).

Stardust – I know just what to do.

6a           Narration – Later that day…

Int. girl’s house – He sits at the table in the dress as he was before, but now with the evil grin on his face.

                Stardust – 3, 2, 1…

                                They hear barking in the next room.

                Girl – Lucky? What is it boy?

She gets up to see what the matter is.

7a           He throws off the dress and runs away.

                                Cut to – Stardust running.

                Stardust – I’m free! I’m free!

                                He stops for a moment.

                Stardust – Now the question is—

8a                           The shot widens to reveal he is completely surrounded by trees.

                Stardust – Where the hell am I?

Narration – End of Act II

Act II

1b           Stardust – Well that’s just fantastic.

He hears a voice offscreen.

                Voice – Where’s the money Lebowski?!

2b                           He looks around and sees the squirrel (who henceforth will be referred to as “Leader” for the sake of distinction) with two henchmen. They are roughing up a chipmunk.

                Leader – You’ve had two weeks Lebowski.

                                He punches the chipmunk in the stomach.

Leader - This isn’t good business Lebowski.

                Stardust – What are you doing?

                                Leader turns around.

                Leader – You? What are you doing here?

                Stardust – I’ve just escaped from a rather unpleasant entrapment.

                Leader – Well we’re kind of busy here so could you please go home.

3b           Stardust – I would love to but unfortunately I have no idea where I am or how to get there.

                Leader – Could you hang on just one second?

                                He slaps the chipmunk across the face.

                Leader – If I don’t get my money in 24 hours you’ll wish you were never born Lebowski.

                                They let him go.

                Leader – I’m sorry you had to see that.

                Stardust – Yeah whatever. Now could you tell me how to get home?

                Leader – Oh you’re a lo-o-o-o-ng way from there my friend. I could arrange for transportation…

4b           Stardust – I don’t have anything to give you.

                Leader – Oh really? What’s thing around your neck then?

                                Cut to – Insert shot of bag of catnip

                Stardust – Hey I know what you’re thinking and you can forget it!

                Leader – Fine then. It’s about… four hours to your house by foot. If you start walking I’m sure you can make it before midnight. 

                Stardust – But…it’s…Canadian.

Leader – Yeah, so is Mike Meyers. Ciao!

                He and his henchmen start to walk away.

5b           Stardust – Wait.

                Leader turns around.

                Leader – I’m listening…

                                Stardust unties the bag from around his neck and holds it up.

Stardust – Now get me the hell outta here!

6b                           Leader snatches the bag from him.

Leader – Wait here.

                                They leave. Stardust sits down.

                Pause

7b           Stardust – Ok… Just…waiting here.

                Pause

8b           Stardust - He’s not coming back is he?

                Narration – End of Act II

Act III

1c            Stardust – Well screw this.

                                He gets up and begins to walk away.

2c                            Suddenly a hawk swoops down and lands in front of him.

Hawk – I have been instructed to take you to your house.

Stardust – Well it’s about bloody ti--

                The hawk picks him up by his arms and flies him high into the sky.

3c            Stardust – Man I can see everyone from here. This must be what it feels like to work for Google.

                Hawk– Do you see your house yet?

Stardust – Ummm….There it is! Hey I never noticed we had a chimney.

Hawk – Down the chimney eh? Whatever you say!

Stardust – No I didn’t say down the chimney you—

4c                            He drops him down the chimney. He rolls out the fireplace into the living room kicking up soot everywhere.

                Stardust - *Cough Cough*.

                                Freddie runs down the stairs.

                Freddie – My good friend you are alive! I was so very, very worried.

                                He looks around.

                Freddie – Wow, what a mess.

5c            Stardust – Eh it’ll be fine. Where is she off to?

                Freddie – Looking for you. Where have you been anyway?

Stardust – Oh where haven’t I been? I’ve seen parts of the commonwealth I never even knew existed! And where were you?

Freddie – Well I tried to rescue you but…I had no idea you had so few friends.

                                The front door begins to open.

                Stardust – Here she is, am-scray!

6c            Owner - *Gasp* There you are!

                                She runs and picks him up.

Owner – Oh you’ve been playing in the fireplace! I should be angry at you but I’m just happy you’re safe!

                                She hugs him.

                Stardust – You know I don’t think I’ve been happier to see your butch dyke haircut either.

7c                            Int. – Attic - They sit in front of the TV.

                Narration – Later that day…

                Stardust - …and that’s how it all happened.

                Freddie – One thing I don’t get is: how did you get that dog to bark just when you needed him to?

                                Cut to – Lucky sitting on an enormous pile of cookies.

8c            Stardust – I’ll never tell.

                Narration – Fin.